How Not to Open a Cover Letter

Want to move from being marked as a “New Candidate” to “Rejected” really, really quickly? Open your cover letter like this: 

In review of the requirements listed for the Business Analyst position at your client Magenic, I believe that my experience is in line with your needs. I’m currently pursuing new opportunities that focus on business development and client relationship management, and would be interested in speaking with you to discuss the strengths and experience that I can bring to this position at your client, including the following:

He goes on to list a number of strengths related to business development and selling, including cold-call training, and “ABC” attitude, etc.

Don’t get me wrong: those aren’t bad things. In fact, if the title of the role was, say, Sales Executive, this thing would make sense. But it doesn’t. At all.

My gut is he’s trying to bend and fit into any role he can, without making enough effort to demonstrate how he’s a fit. The irony is that he’s a sales guy, and not selling himself.

How Not to Open a Cover Letter

Not a good way to open a cover letter. I’d love to see if you can tell me why (hint: it’s not because the company is “(XYZ)” – I did that to obscure the name of the employer:

“I am presenting my résumé to be considered for the varied positions that I may qualify for within your organization. I am currently providing Analyst Support to (XYZ) Financial in the effort to further hone, as well as acquire more innovative on-job skills.”

If Common Sense Ruled the Universe….

If you’re applying for jobs that require written communication (business analyst, project manager, copywriter, etc etc), and don’t include a great cover letter, you’re missing a chance to show off.

A Sweet, Vast Cover Letter

You tell me – does this work for you as a cover letter?

Hi, My name is Bob and I’m planing a relocation with my sweet wife to the US. I have a vast knowledge in integration and specifically in BizTalk.

If relevant we can schedule a video interview.

Thanks, Bob Melbat

Please Do the Needful

Hi ,

In concern of the available vacancy and recruitment in place at your end, I am forwarding here with my updated resume as attachment. Please do the needful .

During my tenure at your organization I can be proved as the best suitable employee as I possesses qualities of

- A Strong Candidature with excellent problem solving skill

- Strong verbal and written communications skills (both inter and Intra Official)

- Professional attitude and Self motivated with strong work ethics of a self starter

- Demonstrated ability to work effectively as a team member as well as individual contributor.

- Strong technical experience sufficient to administer and configure test environments.

- Thorough at concepts.

Please do the needful for the ongoing recruitment in your esteemed organization and revert me with any relevant feedback.

Regards